Tuesday, October 25

Book Progress

It's taking a bit longer than I thought to get my next book out, but I am very happy with where it is at and I'm in a loop of perfecting it now. Here's the cover:

But might have to change the copyright date at this rate!

It's currently at the right length. It's 43 chapters and 434 pages. I am on my tenth iteration proofreading it. My process is to make the changes in MS Word, print to pdf, read and annotate it on my iPad, and repeat. The first version I proofread this way had 49 chapters and 477 pages. I'm eliminated a lot of less good stuff, while adding in some AWESOME stuff. My bar for adding anything, a paragraph, a sentence, even a word, is very high. Only if it makes it clearly better. My bar for cutting stuff is pretty low. If it's not really adding much, if it's not awesome, it goes. So far, each iteration is clearly better than the last. Still finding little typos, but those are getting few and far between. I wrestle a lot with commas. I know what is correct, but if it doesn't read well, I change it. A real editor would likely spank me for my punctuation, but I like it.

It's told from the point of view of a then 18-year-old boy gone to live with his Aunty Sue and her sexy young submissive wife Chrissie. It's got a very nice story arc to it. Nothing fancy. Just a bunch of kinky adventures leading to a happily-ever-after femdom ending.

Here is the cast of characters.

  • David - 18 year old young man living in with his aunts for first year university
  • Aunty Sue - David's aunt. His mother's older sister. Accomplished university professor. Very strict. Lesbian. Sexually turned on spanking girls. Tolerates spanking David for his own good.
  • Aunt Chrissie - Sue's much younger bi-sexual submissive wife. A walking boner-inducing machine. Bubbly. Fun. A housewife. Educated with a masters degree. Dances seriously as a hobby.
  • Sarah - David's Mom. She and Sue were spanked as children. Sarah got sexually excited from these spankings.
  • Lance - the dominant gay fitness trainer
  • Tamara, Mandy, Meghan - Chrissie's hot friends from dance class.
  • Beverly and Joyce - Sue's older friends. A lesbian couple. Both professors. Beverly was David's English Lit professor. Joyce is in gender studies.
  • Amanda - A girl, David's age, from Chrissie's dance class. They date.

Here's a list/synopsis of most of the stuff in there.

  • Consent, consent, consent, everywhere. Responsible consensually non-consensual play only.
  • Lots of sexy talk about spanking things.
  • David sexually teased by his sexy Aunt Chrissie.
  • David overhears his aunts having sex, including a good girl spanking for Chrissie.
  • David messes his sheets. Chrissie punishes him by making him stroke his dick in front of her.
  • Chrissie spanked by Sue behind closed doors for forgetting the dry cleaning.
  • David sees Chrissie's bare bum corner time.
  • David applies cold cream to Chrissie's bum and inner thighs.
  • Chrissie makes herself cum as David rubs her. Shhhh! Don't tell Sue!
  • David gets his first ever handy in his young life from Chrissie.
  • David is caught snooping in his aunts' room. He suggests the same sort of consensual domestic discipline arrangement with his Aunty Sue that Chrissie has.
  • Sue clears it with Chrissie, and David's Mom (so embarrassing for him!), and then gives him his first spanking: an all-over affair with her hairbrush then an hour of bare bum corner time just like Chrissie got.
  • Chrissie comes home at the tail end of David's bare naked corner time. She applies the cold cream to David's ass. Equally aggrieved, she gives him a handy, inviting Sue in to watch her cruelly ruin it.
  • As her part of her punishment of David, she gets permission from Sue to make David eat his own cum as they watch.
  • David's day-to-day spankings involving nose-to-grindstone schoolwork are recounted.
  • Two of Chrissie's hot dance friends come over while David is serving his daily timeout during a two-week grounding. He is not excused.
  • David's Mom comes for a visit, bringing the strap her and Sue's Daddy used on them. Some of their childhood spankings are recounted
  • David gets a taste of that strap from Mom, showing her disappointment in David's abuse of his aunts trust during the snooping incident.
  • David's Mom is spanked behind closed doors by big sister Sue for past transgressions.
  • David is spontaneously and inexpertly spanked by Chrissie with her house slipper for tracking in mud.
  • Sue is not pleased that Chrissie spanked without permission. She shows Chrissie how to properly spank using a slipper, spanking her pantied butt for the first time in front of David.
  • Sue then gives David a much more serious bare bum slipper spanking across her knee while Chrissie smugly watches.
  • Chrissie messes up by not handing in one of David's assignments that she volunteered to hand in for him. Sue saves the day with her connections on the grade, then hand spanks a nude Chrissie all over, fronts and tops included, while David is allowed to watch. Before her spanking, Chrissie is required to do a sexy strip-tease in front of Sue and David. She is marked out of ten. She will be given two strokes of the strap for each point less than ten.
  • David is given a very severe caning for repeatedly lying to Aunty Sue about schoolwork while surfing porn and playing video games instead. He is caught red-handed!
  • Chrissie has a friend Meghan over and neglects to prepare dinner. She is spanked by Sue in front of David and Meghan. Sue allows Meghan to apply the cold cream while giving the two a "hall pass" which Sue and David hear.
  • David's English Lit professor and her lesbian wife come over for dinner. The domestic discipline arrangement is openly discussed.
  • While the guests are still there, Sue learns that David has not yet completed the math assignment due next day. He was already spanked for procrastinating on this assignment. There will be a "more serious discussion" on the matter after their guests leave.
  • The guests are interested. Don't let us stop you, they say. David has his pants and underpants removed and is seen sporting a huge erection. He is given a severe strapping over the back of the couch in front of the guests.
  • During corner time, before dinner is served, the English Lit prof tells about a Victorian era punishment called "figging" that she read about. Chrissie happens to have a ginger root on hand. David is figged and then made to put his underwear and shirt back on and sit to eat dinner with them.
  • The burning subsides, but David is still squirming. They discover he AGAIN has a massive erection! He is sent to his room to "take care of it" and then come back and show them the result.
  • David decides to put on a show and moan needlessly loudly while doing the deed in his bedroom. When he gets back with a limp dick and a handful of cum, the ladies are not pleased with his display. Chrissie whips up his cum into his own personal sauce for the chicken which he must eat and then clean the plate completely as the ladies all look on.
  • After dinner, Sue removes the ginger root from his bum. It is very messy! He must hold his cheeks apart while he is very publicly wiped by his Aunty in front of their guests.
  • Chrissie reveals that David has been none too careful with his hygiene of late, putting skid marks in his undies. He is sentenced to remedial potty training for a week, right in front of the guests!
  • Chrissie's dance friends drop by for a second time to rehearse a sexy number. David is allowed to watch, but pops a boner under the pillow he uses to try to hide it.
  • The girls all agree David should be spanked for it, and Sue is happy to oblige. As he is stripped, the excitement is too much for him, and he begins leaking strands of pre-cum.
  • He is told to go take care of it before his spanking. Chrissie asks if she and the girls can watch. Sue agrees to David's chagrin.
  • David is reluctant in front of the girls. Sue is called in and gives him a diaper-position strapping, his leaky cock painting his face with pre-cum as he is strapped, legs high and back.
  • David must do the deed now. Halfway through, one of the friends, Tamara, volunteers to finish it with her hand. She has David gaze deeply into her eyes as she makes him cum. David is in puppy-love!
  • Chrissie decides she wants to come out of the closet as a spanking fetishist and organizes a party.
  • At the party she explains the sudation and receives a demonstration spanking from Sue. The crowd clamours for her panties to be lowered, and so they are.
  • Chrissie is a server for the rest of the party, where all the guests have been invited to spank her at will to show their support. She receives a doozy for spilling a drink on Lance, the gay fitness instructor, and has her panties confiscated for the rest of the evening.
  • Sue, Chrissie, and David are watching a movie that Sue chose. It has homosexual guys kissing. David expresses his distaste in an unacceptable manner. Chrissie gets angry at him, utters some choice words of her own, and storms out. Sue mouth soaps and spanks both of them.
  • David's homophobia is explored. Sue decides David should experience gay sex. He refuses! Chrissie  coaxes him by saying she can arrange a tryst with his puppy-love Tamara where anything goes if he agrees to have gay sex first. The prospect of popping his cherry with Tamara is too much for him, and he agrees to the gay sex with Lance, the dommie gay fitness instructor from the party.
  • To prepare him, under Sue's supervision, Chrissie is allowed to use Sue's strap-on dildo on David daily for the ten days prior.
  • On day six a package arrives from Lance. It is a cock cage for David to wear until Lance shows up! His Aunts delight in locking him up and watching him writhe as he inevitably tries to erect.
  • Lance arrives and has full-on gay sex with David as Chrissie watches. Lance spanks him for being less than eager. He is much more enthusiastic after his spanking. Lance makes David cum with only his cock up his ass. They have mutual orgasms, Lance spewing into David's ass, David spewing into the air and all over the bed sheets as Lance holds him up. Chrissie watches wide-eyed.
  • They come out of the bedroom, Lance carrying a naked David. His cheeks are spread and Sue comments on how distended David's bum hole still is. She notices the sperm dribbling from his anus and tells him to put on his underpants so he won't dribble sperm around the house.
  • Having fulfilled his side, Chrissie gets Tamara to come over and David and she are left in private to lose his girl-cherry to her.
  • Tamara is too old for David, and in an open relationship besides. Chrissie sets David up with a girl his age, Amanda, from dance class.
  • They go on a first date to a ping-pong emporium. David thinks he's good. Amanda is better. The stakes are six ping pong paddle strokes for each game lost over the shorts. David loses miserably. He was set up!
  • Amanda and David start seeing a lot of each other. Amanda wants David to take her to the formal dance. Afterwards, she says she wants to have sex with him. Davis is all in, except he has a midnight curfew. He ignores his curfew and they have sex.
  • Amanda drives David home. His Aunt is waiting for him, fuming. It comes out that David has been lying to Amanda about multiple things. He is to be punished in the morning for curfew violation. Amanda asks to come by to watch it. Under pain of a break-up, David reluctantly agrees.
  • David is spanked and cornered while Amanda watches. She loves it!
  • For cornertime, David is humbled with his cock held back between his legs.  Afterwards, he must face them, humbled, and apologize. Amanda and Chrissie get the idea to draw a pussy on David with black and red indelible markers, because he behaved like such a pussy during his spanking.
  • Deciding he has had enough for one day, Amanda asks to come by the next day to punish him as well. His aunts agree.
  • Amanda comes by next day. She is wearing jeans and a thick leather belt. Amanda severely leathers him, nude, over the back of the couch as his aunties watch.
  • With Chrissie's help, Amanda applies the cold cream to David's scorched bottom. Chrissie needs to teach the naïve Amanda how to give a hand job. Before they're done, Chrissie gives her one of their strap-ons and shows Amanda how to use it. She fucks him missionary style while making him cum with her hand.
  • Afterwards, Amanda and David are left alone to clean each other off in the shower. To mark her territory, Amanda pauses the water and pisses on David in the shower stall. She later tells his aunts that she did it. They are delighted. She informs David they are going steady.
  • In the epilogue, it is several years later. Amanda and David are married. He's a cucked hubbie. Amanda openly spanks David in front of his family. David loves it all.
  • And they live happily ever after.
What do you think? Pretty good, eh? I still get excited reading the chapters. I confess to stroking my pussy as I proofread. If I'm not wet, it isn't good enough yet! There's so much great detail in there and darned fine writing!
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Soon... soon!

Stay tuned!

32 comments:

  1. Looks very good indeed. Can't wait to read it! Did you scrape the babysitter part in the end? Also if I'm understanding correctly, in the forced bi scene David will end up enjoying himself? That's an interesting approach. Anyway, again I'm very much looking forward to read the book! Hopefully in 2022 ;)

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    1. I did. I felt it was too much time with Beverly. I also scrapped diaper time which was related (Sorry diaper people!). Felt like it was too distant a kink and challenged suspension of disbelief.

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  2. Anything that comes out of the depths of you mind will always be great, and has always been great. I look forward to reading. I think I would have done a lot more chastity work here, especially with the allure and temptation of the hot, little Chrissie prancing around.
    I would definitely involve chastity near the end if David winds up in a cuckold relationship with Amanda. He’s locked up and required to suck and fluff he gentleman callers, as he then stands in the corner and is forced to listen to the erection that his mouth made possible, penetrate his wife / gf.

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    1. Perhaps I'll add it to the epilogue? He does get a taste of it in the book. But I liked giving David plenty of awkward boners at just the wrong time!

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  3. snnif je ne pourrai pas l'acheter a cause d'amazon triste

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    1. Perhaps you can translate it for me and I can then post it on Amazon in French as well?

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    2. Je suis nul en anglais, génération qui ne connais pas les langues, donc pour traduire se serait que avec un traducteur informatique avec tous les erreurs possible dans ces traductions...
      Ce que je ne comprends pas, pourquoi amazon ne permet plus de traduire les livres en anglais, j'ai demandé mais aucune réponse logique ne m'a été fournie ...
      C'est un peu, puisque c'est la mode de dire cela , une discrimination de ceux qui ne connaissent pas les langues, mais la bien sur, aucune association que l'on entends d'habitude sur tout les sujets ne sont la, pour surement une seule raison que cela n'intéresse personne ....
      Sauf pour ceux proba

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  4. love this! It sounds so in depth, and complete, it should be a hell of a read. Especially like the cumming in the David/Lance portion for obvious reasons ;-)

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  5. I must say reading the "Cliff Notes" of your next book is getting me excited to read the whole thing.

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  6. It doesn't get any better for those of us with the similar inclination, Julie. I don't think you'll mind it be compared to Ayn Rand's 'Atlas Shrugged' - it's fiction, but it's the right crowd's (definitely, my) manifesto!


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    1. We're maybe a small audience, but we're passionate!

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  7. I'll wait for the movie version!
    I hope all your hard work is well rewarded.

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    1. I'll maybe make $1000 or $2000 from it. Given the hours put in, much less than minimum wage! My reward is the creative process, the hours and hours of sexy fantasizing, and the enjoyment of my readers. I hope I'll be able to count on you as one of them!

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    2. Sorry Julie but I'm not into the Auntie thing at all so will have to pass but I'm sure there will be lots who love that .

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    3. It's by no means the traditional aunty thing.

      It's an adult young David asking his Aunt to assist him by engaging as the top in a consensual domestic discipline arrangement to keep him on track at school. There is no sexual relationship there at all. That's what Chrissie is for (and Tamara, Lance, Amanda, ...).

      I doubt it would be anything like what you imagine a traditional Auntie thing would be.

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  8. I hate to tell you this, but this seems a bit tired. I recommend something a bit more novel for your next attempt

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    1. Ha ha! Thank you for the encouragement!

      It's a situation I have not written about before, so it's inherently interesting to me.

      But if you know any other books where an 18-y.o. young man moves in with his Aunt and her much younger bisexual wife, I'd love to hear about it!

      Makes a great plot device for all sorts of interesting kinky scenes, as described.

      I think it's super creative and know folks that share our kink will love it!

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    2. Indeed I can confirm that this guy has no idea what he is talking about. I've read thousand of stories in that genre and most novels I've read either focus on spanking with very little kinks / sex mixed in or on the contrary focus on kinks / sex with very little emphasis on spanking. So it's actually very rare to have books that mix the two as well as yours do (as well as your blog) and why as you pointed out a lot of kinky / spanko folks love it.

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  9. Men may think they are in charge, but this book will show far from it. To be spanked as an adult is one thing but when your girlfriend, aunt, wife, decide it needs to go further a public spanking, then and only then will he know who wears the pants in the family. Been there, and reminded my kicking and squirming is what little boys do when they are getting a spanking and I feel as such. Mommy knows what is best for her naughty little boy and this little boy knows who runs the household. Jack

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    1. Lots of embarrassing public spankings for poor David in the book. Many in front of Chrissie's hot young dance friends.

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  10. Miss Julie, there are definitely offenses listed in that summary that I have committed. I am sure that I would be deserving of the sorts of spankings that David would earn for his misbehaviors I am lucky that I would not have a pair of very strict aunts who give me the punishment I would deserve. I'm not sure that I would be capable of taking all of the penalties that they would dish out

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    1. Yes. You kids nowadays with your video games and your pornos. How about a little hard work, young man? If I can't get that through to you in the head, we'll just have to try from the other end.

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    2. Sometimes a naughty boy needs a reminder. Just exactly how would you take it out on the other end?

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    3. I think maybe the strap to your bottom until you're howling. I'm good at that.

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  11. Can’t wait for this to be in my Kindle library…. Does David have to wear any of the panties he finds in his Aunt’s bedroom? Auntie stories are amongst my favourite.
    Raul…

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  12. I can't wait to buy this and download it to my Kindle. Your other two books are wonderful and, in my humble opinion, are the best stuff out there along with Sara Wyatt's books Submission and Love, Sex and the Whip.

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